Good but...
It's really good, but you should really check for balance of syllables in each group of sentences, it makes it more lyrical. Otherwise it's really good.
Good but...
It's really good, but you should really check for balance of syllables in each group of sentences, it makes it more lyrical. Otherwise it's really good.
I'm not a very experienced poem writer. :-p Thanks for the suggestion, as it should help me improve my bizarre sense of rhythm.
Ace Action Jackson
Excellent. Nice art!
Thank you. If you haven't seen it, I did my best to stay true to the art of the TV Show Clerks. Great show, check it out.
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That hurt my ears.
I Love you too.
Why
This is so bad, that I'm tasting metal and seeing spots. I think I've had a stroke.
Just snicker at the end and give it a 2
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Clownpasta
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